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16:48 Oct 25, 2018 

Much, much better than mine. Thanks Taña for supporting my view of the text drafting.

15:34 Oct 25, 2018 

Perhaps other colleagues too, while not necessarily a part of your question, may have other ideas to tweak your text, but you are right that the language appears to be "demasiado rebuscado".

15:30 Oct 25, 2018 

Lydia - perhaps? (you have not included "the points of sale (of the technologies)" in your proposal.

Weaknesses:
Credit promoters and water and sanitation technicians agree on a major focus of the campaign, specifically, awareness raising and education components relating to water, sanitation & hygiene services (WASH) to the population, but lacks a promotional approach to marketing that would (* perhaps "stimulate"? I can't decide, hence I included a list of synonyms) price, the benefits of the solutions, as well as the point of sale (of the technologies).

* promote verb
1. support or actively encourage (a cause, venture, etc.); further the progress of.
Sinónimos: encourage, further, advance, assist, aid, help, contribute to, foster, nurture, develop, boost, stimulate, forward; advocate, recommend, urge, support, back, endorse, champion, speak for, proselytize, sponsor, espouse, push for, work for

14:13 Oct 25, 2018 

Credit promoters and water and sanitation technicians agree in a large part of the campaign, specifically in the awareness-raising and education components focused on WASH [services] for the population, however they lacked a marketing promotion approach that would promote [WASH solutions] price, benefits of said solutions