Apr 2, 2022 05:07
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el rocío cubría su pelo,
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I would like to know the best translation of this phrase from Latin American Spanish into American English. Translator colleagues from Spain, feel free to send me your suggestions as well. This is a translation about Mythology. Is okay to translate as when the dew was covering his hair?
It's about the story of Theseus and the Minotaur.
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«Jamás te abandonaré» respondió Teseo, y no fue capaz de esperar un año más para probarse ante la roca y día tras día empujaba la piedra forzando todos sus músculos. Hasta que un día, cuando el rocío cubría su pelo, sintió que la roca cedía, y con un último esfuerzo la desplazó y allí encontró una espada y la identidad de su padre, pues su padre era Egeo, rey de Atenas.
It's about the story of Theseus and the Minotaur.
I hope that all of you are healthy and safe from Covid19.
Here is the full paragraph for your review:
«Jamás te abandonaré» respondió Teseo, y no fue capaz de esperar un año más para probarse ante la roca y día tras día empujaba la piedra forzando todos sus músculos. Hasta que un día, cuando el rocío cubría su pelo, sintió que la roca cedía, y con un último esfuerzo la desplazó y allí encontró una espada y la identidad de su padre, pues su padre era Egeo, rey de Atenas.
Proposed translations
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| 4 +2 | The dew shrouded his hair/formed a shroud on his hair |
Andrew Bramhall
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| 3 | while the mist was surrounding his head |
Barbara Cochran, MFA
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| 1 | when his hair was drenched in sweat |
Sophie Cherel
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Apr 22, 2022 13:21: Lucia Leszinsky changed "Level" from "PRO" to "Non-PRO"
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Andrew Bramhall
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The dew shrouded his hair/formed a shroud on his hair
The dew covered his hair, literally, but in this register you could use ' formed a shroud/ shrouded' his hair, given the similarity of imagery to the burial of Jesus:
"I will never forsake you," replied Theseus, and he could not wait another year to test himself before the rock, and day after day he pushed at the stone, straining all his muscles. That was until one day, as the dew covered/shrouded his hair, he felt the rock give way, and with a last effort he moved it and there he found a sword and the identity of his father, for his father was Aegeus, king of Athens.
"I will never forsake you," replied Theseus, and he could not wait another year to test himself before the rock, and day after day he pushed at the stone, straining all his muscles. That was until one day, as the dew covered/shrouded his hair, he felt the rock give way, and with a last effort he moved it and there he found a sword and the identity of his father, for his father was Aegeus, king of Athens.
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| Thanks for your help Andrew. |
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Sophie Cherel
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when his hair was drenched in sweat
Rocío means dew, but I struggle to see how that could be the meaning in this case, unless the author wants to say Theseus moved the rock early in the morning.
So, since this passage is all about Theseus' hard work to move the rock, maybe it means sweat?
By the way, in the original story, Theseus moves the rock effortlessly at his first try.
So, since this passage is all about Theseus' hard work to move the rock, maybe it means sweat?
By the way, in the original story, Theseus moves the rock effortlessly at his first try.
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| Thanks for your help Sophie. |
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Andrew Bramhall
: I really doubt it; if they'd meant that, they'd have used ' sudor';
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You're probably right Andrew, it's just a guess
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Barbara Cochran, MFA
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while the mist was surrounding his head
Another, less literal option.
https://context.reverso.net/translation/spanish-english/rocí...
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Note added at 12 hrs (2022-04-02 17:35:27 GMT)
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or just "surrounded".
https://context.reverso.net/translation/spanish-english/rocí...
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Note added at 12 hrs (2022-04-02 17:35:27 GMT)
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or just "surrounded".
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| Thanks for your help Barbara. |
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